Poetry Challenge #44 – Ghazal – Whispered Words

Written by Matthew Tonks

I’ve been playing with the idea for weeks, I’m not a poet, but I wanted to try and see if I could at least pull off a half, maybe not decent, but a half okay, sort of all right, you know, passable poem. Sadly, it seems, I picked a bad week to try my hand at Jane Dougherty’s poetry challenge, but I’ve made up my mind to give it a crack anyway. So, enjoy, it was fun.

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As the sun’s rays break through the dark morning sky,

I let my mind wander, I let my heart fly.

I rise up though the trees, up through the clouds,

My mind is a condor, I let my heart fly.

I rush towards her beauty, I feel her soft light,

I let my mind ponder, I let my heart fly.

Through day and though night and through sunset I fight,

Surviving just to feel her, I let my heart fly.

I’m griped by her power, I’m lost in her love,

Her love I don’t squander, I let my heart fly.

Dawn was a theme, and a Ghazal is a love poem, so I think, this worked. Head over here to join in on the challenge.

23 thoughts on “Poetry Challenge #44 – Ghazal – Whispered Words”

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    1. Thanks, I never thought I would attempt anything like this and it was fun, I also guess its all part of the journey, challenging yourself to do what you are unsure of because you don’t know what will happen if you try.

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    1. Thanks, I really had no idea where I was going with it at first, but it built itself from the bottom up, once I had the final line it just worked. Oh and I realised it was missing the last verse just before I posted it, but in the end, I enjoyed it, and I’m glad you did too.

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  11. Thank you for contributing. I’m so pleased you decided to take the plunge. Making a poem public has always seemed to me harder than letting unknowns read a piece of prose. Poetry is more personal maybe. You’re right, this was a tough week to choose for a debut, but you can be proud of your ghazal—I would be if I’d written it 🙂

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    1. Jane, thank you, I had fun with it, certainly not something I have ever really tried my hand at before, I’ve rhymed before, but never built a poem with so many rules behind it 🙂 I’m looking forward to next weeks challenge.

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      1. I’m glad 🙂 It’s been a steep learning curve for me too, with so many different forms to try out. I’ve stopped insisting on a new one each week since many of the new ones I don’t find particularly interesting, and some of the classic forms go on forever. Sometimes it’s just an image, a theme and a handful of words. We’ll see next week.

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