Poetry Challenge #44 – Ghazal – Whispered Words

I’ve been playing with the idea for weeks, I’m not a poet, but I wanted to try and see if I could at least pull off a half, maybe not decent, but a half okay, sort of all right, you know, passable poem. Sadly, it seems, I picked a bad week to try my hand at Jane Dougherty’s poetry challenge, but I’ve made up my mind to give it a crack anyway. So, enjoy, it was fun.

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As the sun’s rays break through the dark morning sky,

I let my mind wander, I let my heart fly.

I rise up though the trees, up through the clouds,

My mind is a condor, I let my heart fly.

I rush towards her beauty, I feel her soft light,

I let my mind ponder, I let my heart fly.

Through day and though night and through sunset I fight,

Surviving just to feel her, I let my heart fly.

I’m griped by her power, I’m lost in her love,

Her love I don’t squander, I let my heart fly.

Dawn was a theme, and a Ghazal is a love poem, so I think, this worked. Head over here to join in on the challenge.

23 responses to “Poetry Challenge #44 – Ghazal – Whispered Words”

    1. Thanks so much, I enjoy working outside my comfort zone, so any chance I get to experiment, I’ll try.

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  3. Beautiful. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

    1. Thanks so much, it was a very different beast from what I normally work with, I really enjoyed stretching myself.

      1. Yes, it was different. I was surprised that I could ultimately follow the rules, atleast majority of them.

      2. I was too, it was a fun exercise, it’s funny what you can do when you take the leap.

  4. That’s quite lovely. 🙂

  5. Brilliant! Oh… you’re a poet alright! No doubt about it…. 😉

    1. Thanks, it was a challenge, but enjoyed it, something I never really played with before. I’ll definitely have another go at some more in the future.

      1. Good! Look forward to reading more. 🙂

  6. Hey…thanks…n great words…

    1. Thanks, I never thought I would attempt anything like this and it was fun, I also guess its all part of the journey, challenging yourself to do what you are unsure of because you don’t know what will happen if you try.

  7. Lovely ghazal! It was a tricky week to start, but this is great. I particularly like the image of your mind as a condor. Thank you for sharing.

    1. Thanks, I really had no idea where I was going with it at first, but it built itself from the bottom up, once I had the final line it just worked. Oh and I realised it was missing the last verse just before I posted it, but in the end, I enjoyed it, and I’m glad you did too.

  8. Reblogged this on Things I Like to Blog About… and commented:
    This poem struck a chord with me. Freedom and love! Enjoy

  9. I thought this was very good…reblogging this.

    1. Thanks so much, it was a fun tale to write, so many things wrapped in a word.

  10. Thank you for contributing. I’m so pleased you decided to take the plunge. Making a poem public has always seemed to me harder than letting unknowns read a piece of prose. Poetry is more personal maybe. You’re right, this was a tough week to choose for a debut, but you can be proud of your ghazal—I would be if I’d written it 🙂

    1. Jane, thank you, I had fun with it, certainly not something I have ever really tried my hand at before, I’ve rhymed before, but never built a poem with so many rules behind it 🙂 I’m looking forward to next weeks challenge.

      1. I’m glad 🙂 It’s been a steep learning curve for me too, with so many different forms to try out. I’ve stopped insisting on a new one each week since many of the new ones I don’t find particularly interesting, and some of the classic forms go on forever. Sometimes it’s just an image, a theme and a handful of words. We’ll see next week.

      2. I look forward to it 😀

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