“Can we really trust him? He’s like, our greatest enemy.” She says.
“I know, but the very world threatens to shatter itself into a million pieces, I don’t see that we really have any other choice.”
They look over to him, as he sits there, grinning proudly at them both.
You can read the 50 Word Story Extended version HERE, or, if you’re feeling game, try to extend it yourself like The Grateful Dead – The Voice of the Mortals did HERE.
Nice! I love alliances born of necessity . . . especially with dangerous villains!
Sounds like my kind of villain! Xp
Haha, or, is it the other way around?
This one was too tempting to let it slide. I had to make an attempt. I don’t know why I am not being able to link back here so check it out and tell me how different my version is from what you originally had in mind!!!
https://thegratefuldeadblog.wordpress.com/2016/10/20/hes-got-the-whole-world-in-his-hands/
Amazing version, totally not where I was thinking, not even in the same ballpark. Brilliant 👍
Lol. Blame it on motherhood?!
Haha, when I was reading it, I could see my daughter is sitting there, holding damnation over us, as she does. It was a brilliant direction you took it in.
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I’m eager to see where this one is going..
I admire your ability to write a story in 50 words or less. The shortest story I’ve written (which I put online yesterday) is 616 words long. I have a tough time telling what I feel is a complete story with a lesser word count and in fact, most of my short stories are around 1200 to 1500 words long.
Thanks so much, I try to make the 50 word stories as complete as I can, but, I’m totally with you on the lengths. Because, I know deep down, the 50 word stories are missing vital pieces of their journey, leaving the reader to fill in those pieces of the puzzle that should be controlled by me, which is ultimately why I started expanding the shorts. As, I find the expanded versions more satisfying, more complete, in my head, not just a shadow of a story, pretending to be complete.
Something else is already coming.
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